Edit and Revision- For Draft

Revision-1. All of the sentences of the paragraph should relate to the first sentence.  

2. The first sentence must give a brief overview of what the paragraph is about. 

3. I should add more dialogue. 

Edit-1. I should use more semicolons to add more ideas and details.

2. I  should change my vocabulary is some of the sentences to keep the words clear. 

3 I should write between 6-8 sentences for each paragraph